Editing from Steven

Author: wlach

pages/index.md

@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@ title: Some Notes on Electrification and Solar in Ontario, Canada
 👋 Hi! I'm [Will Lachance](https://wrla.ch), a software developer living in Hamilton, Ontario, Canada.
 For those of you who don't know where Hamilton is, it's near Toronto.
 
-In late 2023, my partner and I had a number of projects done on our house in, to reduce our greenhouse gas emissions while, also, hopefully saving us some money. Specifically we:
+In late 2023, my partner and I had a number of projects done on our house to reduce our greenhouse gas emissions while, also, hopefully saving us some money. Specifically we:
 
 - Replaced our end-of-life gas furnace with a cold-weather heat pump
 - Added a small amount of insulation in strategic places based on our audit
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ I had a few goals:
 In putting this together, I quickly realized there's just too many variables at play to provide definitive answers on these questions.
 Still, I felt by combining my own data with some credible public figures (e.g. the CO2 emissions associated with natural gas and electrical generation in Ontario) I could at least provide some information and analysis which might be interesting to someone contemplating something similar.
 
-Please note this is not an academic study and, although I have made every effort to provide accurate data and thorough analysis, it has not been formally peer reviewed (although a few friends did give it a once over, thank you!).
+Please note this is not an academic study. Although I have made every effort to provide accurate data and thorough analysis, it has not been formally peer reviewed (although a few friends did give it a once over, thank you!).
 Any errors are my own.
 I reserve the right to adjust my numbers, analysis, and conclusions at any time.
 If I make major changes, I'll note them in the [change log](./changelog).